Monday, October 25, 2010

what thoughts are these
that bring forth a vertigo of sensations
and a grin oozing with defiance?

so dangerously weak
but not even blushing
so ignited -
surely to detonate on contact

17 comments:

  1. Great word choices, palpable-effective work.

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  2. whew...sparse words...with much to say...handle with care..smiles. nice one shot!

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  3. Elegant minimalism - it works on many levels

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  4. A grin oozing with defiance. WOW. Love it. Love and Light, Sender

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  5. the power of thoughts...ready to detonate. Nice, tight writing.
    Victoria

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  6. love the possibility of the thoughts detonating... nicely written

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  7. Far removed from the Magpie prompt, but accomplished nonetheless.

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  8. wow - there' some dynamite in these few words..nice one shot

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  9. beautifully chosen words, and it gives lot of power in little length! :)

    My One Shot Is Here

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  10. Some thoughts are like that Brief and bombastic!

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  11. thank you all, im overwhelmed by your thoughts on this :)

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  12. less is more...spot on..cheers pete

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